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My first attempt at Given Name wasn't very successful. I wanted to have this sweet moment between Belladonna and Ace and address Belladonna's identity crisis (being, you know, amnesiac and all) and then I kept coming up with other things I wanted to do, like get Ace's voice, and have this sort of comfortable-yet-snappy dialogue between them charged with very subtle UST, and also hint at Belladonna's frustration with being so young (compared to Ace) and him being interested but also uncertain because of the age difference...!
Oh, man, it was too much. I started out writing with all these things running through my subconscious, and it took me a page before I realized, Wait, I have too much stuff I'm trying to do here, what do I really want to get at? And I went with the path of least frustration and resistance to do something that could be achieved in as few words as possible, since there are plenty of other things I'm working on that require me to put up more of a fight.
Getting Ace's voice is hard; it sounds very generic when I read him (I kept his dialogue to a bare minimum in the final result). He just isn't in my head. Subsequently, the dialogue doesn't read nearly as snappy or comfortable as I like, either. It sounds very forced in my first attempt. And the UST... I guess this is the problem when I'm not really invested in the ship? I just couldn't get it to come out. UST is also harder to develop/get going the shorter a fic is, I think. Or theorize. IDK, GUYS.
I really would've liked to get the last thing to play (centering on Belladonna's frustration with Ace not wanting to get involved because of her age despite being attracted to her) but that sort of issue requires more build to play convincingly. And it involves two people. Whereas the identity crisis only involves one.
So I went with Belladonna and her identity crisis, because it was a one-person issue, and also because it was easier to work with a voice that was more or less already in my head (Buttercup's). Reading over it, I feel like the whole "intro" is pretty bland and run-of-the-mill; it doesn't really engage me until almost a page down, where I finally go into Belladonna's head. (A page! That was a pretty obvious cue that I needed to re-think this, and I was much happier with the final result.)
We'll see if I ever get around to tackling that two-person issue.
( I originally wanted to call this Highlights. )
Oh, man, it was too much. I started out writing with all these things running through my subconscious, and it took me a page before I realized, Wait, I have too much stuff I'm trying to do here, what do I really want to get at? And I went with the path of least frustration and resistance to do something that could be achieved in as few words as possible, since there are plenty of other things I'm working on that require me to put up more of a fight.
Getting Ace's voice is hard; it sounds very generic when I read him (I kept his dialogue to a bare minimum in the final result). He just isn't in my head. Subsequently, the dialogue doesn't read nearly as snappy or comfortable as I like, either. It sounds very forced in my first attempt. And the UST... I guess this is the problem when I'm not really invested in the ship? I just couldn't get it to come out. UST is also harder to develop/get going the shorter a fic is, I think. Or theorize. IDK, GUYS.
I really would've liked to get the last thing to play (centering on Belladonna's frustration with Ace not wanting to get involved because of her age despite being attracted to her) but that sort of issue requires more build to play convincingly. And it involves two people. Whereas the identity crisis only involves one.
So I went with Belladonna and her identity crisis, because it was a one-person issue, and also because it was easier to work with a voice that was more or less already in my head (Buttercup's). Reading over it, I feel like the whole "intro" is pretty bland and run-of-the-mill; it doesn't really engage me until almost a page down, where I finally go into Belladonna's head. (A page! That was a pretty obvious cue that I needed to re-think this, and I was much happier with the final result.)
We'll see if I ever get around to tackling that two-person issue.
( I originally wanted to call this Highlights. )
